Short Story.  

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I was bored, high on lemonade, and...uh...still bored...So I decided to write a short story...

Criticism is welcome..no, I mean it...

The Man with No Dic...

no wait, wrong story..

Vanquisher of Sins
(thats the lemonade working there, not me..)

It was pure darkness...
It was like as the moon had been blown away, like a candle.
Even the stars dared not shine this night, as if somehow, they knew what was going to happen.
"Please...", a silent plead came from the barn in a near by farm.
The woman was tied up, and hanging from the banisters.
She was sobbing and muttering something incoherently.
The Man with the Knife didn't care, he was set on destroying the world of evil, one sin at a time.
This woman, had been Alice Dahlia, a rich entrepreneur, and a well known miser. She had always scoffed at the poor, thinking that it was Gods punishment for them. "Natural Selection indeed" , she had once said.
How wrong she was.
"Alice Dahlia, Greed, Pride....tut tut...one sinful person, eh?" The Man asked her, toying with her, as a lion does before the kill...
"no...no...I'm...sorry" Alice croaked, every word uttered with pain.
"I have nothing against you, Alice, however, you have sinned against God, you have caused pain to God's Creations" he snarled back at her..
"No matter how much you deny it...you have sinned, and therefore, you MUST pay" as he said the word 'must' he slashed the knife across her stomach.
Guts spilled out of the wound, The Man, the sociopath serial killer enjoyed the sight.
He picked up some of them, and shoved them in her mouth...
He looked up as if in a prayer and said "I have done good..."

End of Part One...

now heres the hidden stuff:

the victims name is Alice, and she's chained, Alice in Chains, geddit?

This thing was based on some movie, about a dude, who kills people cuz of sins they commit, if anyone can tell me the name, do tell...

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11 comments

hehe alice in chains!!
movie uhhh.. im not so much into horror movies
but showing guts in her mouth is similar to that of 'cradle of fear'

August 12, 2008 at 4:58 AM

shoving*

August 12, 2008 at 4:59 AM

XD

Thanks dude, the whole thing was inspired one way or a another...

LEMONADE FOR THE WIN..

August 12, 2008 at 5:02 AM

And Alice in Chains...whoooo!

Cradle of Fear, must check that out!

August 12, 2008 at 5:04 AM

Don't know which movie you're looking for I'm afraid, but very nice imagery there.

August 12, 2008 at 5:06 AM

Hecks, thanks bro...

Love your 28 Items Later, much much better..

August 12, 2008 at 5:09 AM

nice story
sounded to me like the movie se7en

August 12, 2008 at 7:01 AM

yup it's the movie seven

August 13, 2008 at 1:42 AM

Yes, thankshoo peepoo..

I have now achieved perfect peace and tranquility ;)

Thanks, again, now...

*downloads Seven*

August 14, 2008 at 1:09 AM

Approved. :P

August 16, 2008 at 10:24 AM

shoves guts in her mouth.....awesome :3
koool blog dude ^_^

September 3, 2008 at 1:27 AM

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